SWA 21: Review

1)    What is the issue? Is its importance explained?

The issue is the negative and positive effects of increasing Internet and social media reliance.  The importance is explained well, especially in the introduction and conclusion.   

 

2)    Are four distinct perspectives easily identifiable? What are they? Is the thesis informative and concise?

The four groups are university professors and school officials, parents of students and young adults using these technologies, the students and young people, and the makers, marketers, and producers of gadgets.  The thesis is a worded a little awkwardly, but it is informative. 

 

3)    Do the introduction and conclusion offer effective leads to and out of the argument? How do you know?

The introduction leads into the argument well by providing thorough background information and using a nice hook.  The conclusion is effective in driving home the point that the issue is arguable and relevant, but could be improved  by revealing the author’s opinion  more clearly. 

4)    Is the essay effective? Explain? What would you have suggested to the student writer if you had been partnered for peer review?

The essay is effective in showing how the issue is multi-sided.  I would suggest that the writer work on the wording of his/ her thesis and add more of his/ her own opinion in the conclusion.  More information could also be incorporated into the body of the paper.  Other than that, the essay is very well done.